Afsomali writing contest: sahanGalbeed vs Hutuking

[Maandhow]

Write a 3 paragraph short short story. It has to be original material and you have to include a humorous ryhming verse.

The judges will be Noangst, Lamgoodle and myself (others can submit their votes as well) and you will be judged on the following areas:

Beginning: Does writer engage the reader's
attention immediately? Is tone, setting and
character established quickly? 4 points

Characterization: Are characters believable,
well-rounded? Actions and interactions
consistent and well motivated? 4 points

Plot: Does progression seem inevitable without
being too predictable? Is story interesting and
The game has same rules as others
compelling to read? 4 points

Conflict: Does protagonist have a problem
serious enough for the reader to care about? 4 points

Style: Is writing fresh and free of cliches?
Does it reveal writer's own vision and attitude
clearly? 4 points

Mechanics: Is grammar and punctuation correct?
Spelling accurate? 4 points

Good luck gentlemen.

[Saraxnow]

You just copy-pasted the same post

I'm rooting for Sahangalbeed

[Maandhow]

Gudiga garsoorka u qaabilsan qoraaladaan waa
NblueNwhite
Twist
Lamgoodle

[abuu_dujaana]

You can't really draw a comparison between SahanGalbeed and Hutuking they are entirely different,
but Let is see how it goes.

[SahanGalbeed]

Horta , hutu king waa nin aynu saaxib nahay oo nin tageersan maddax banaanida Somaliland weeye . Midda labaad e halkan jirta waxa weeye , anigu arrin aan dhab ahayn ka ma hadlo , wax aanan jirin na iska ma alifo . Tartanada noocan ah e malmlahan danbe is soo bandhigeen dhallinyarta somaliyeed e u xiisoota dhaqankoodi hooyo , anigu inaanaan ka soo qayb galin baan aamisanhay oo dhowr qodob oo kale duwani u sabab yihin .
1/ ciyaal af soomaliga baranaya anigu ma' ihi horta
2/Somalinet anigu waxaan usoo galaa , inaan dadka ugu hanjabo . Haddaan iminka sheeko yar oo cantayn ah oo indinka yara qoslisa aan qoraalkeeda halkan idin la imaado , de cawaandinimadii sahangalbeed saddex sanno lagu ogaa , baa halkan maanta ku burburaysa .
Hadal iyo dhamaanti , iga raali ahaada , "i cannot afford it " ayuu ka yidhi arrintan ninkii ingiriis -ka aha


PS : I am not saying people are making stuff up , waxaan u jeeda everything I talk about has a political/tribal connotation , marka anigu iska OLD baan ahay , I am however enjoying the fun you youngsters are having

[abuu_dujaana]

SahanGalbeed qoraalkaaga waa heer sare ee kawaran haddii laguu qiimeeyo labada tuduc aad soo qortay soodhag ma aha?
Waayo ma doonayo in qalad lagaa fahmo ama laguu arko
Someone who has a very high opinion of himself.

[SahanGalbeed]

De mayee , haddaan iska xanaaqo oo aan cay iska bilaabo , sow garoonka ba la iga saari maayo ? Ummadi dhanayd e i taagersanayd , e is lahayd ninkaas ayaa guusho ino soo hoynaya , sow iyadu na ku ceeboobi-mayso ?{excuse, excuse, excuse . .}
Marka haddeynu ka tix raacno maah-maahdi halkan banadirbeauty ku darsatay xalay tartanki adkaa e ay kula jirta hablahii kale , waxa la yidhi , bay tidhi "aar qooyay , dacawo aya la mooda " , maxa baddaas ba i galinaya aniga ?

[abuu_dujaana]

De mayee , haddaan iska xanaaqo oo aan cay iska bilaabo , sow garoonka ba la iga saari maayo ? Ummadi dhanayd e i taagersanayd , e is lahayd ninkaas ayaa guusho ino soo hoynaya , sow iyadu na ku ceeboobi-mayso ?{excuse, excuse, excuse . .}
Marka haddeynu ka tix raacno maah-maahdi halkan banadirbeauty ku darsatay xalay tartanki adkaa e ay kula jirta hablahii kale , waxa la yidhi , bay tidhi "aar qooyay , dacawo aya la mooda " , maxa baddaas ba i galinaya aniga ?