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hey evry1 ............. i wrote this imaginative writting as part of my asignment for my english class (A's) Very Happy and umm i would grately apreciate your thoughts on what you think of it Very Happy ..................... i wrote a lot more but i thought i should ask what u guys and girls think of the first part (its not about me, just 4 the record that is lol)

She should have never have given her heart, just for it to be crushed to pieces, as if to say it were a glass. How she herself into the situation where she was nothing but a sexual object, till this day she still doesn’t know. She though he loved her, she thought he cared about her, the way she loved and cared about him. Her idea of being in a relationship was the ‘fairy tale’ type, where your lover never would hurt or break your heart. Unfortunately for her she wasn’t in a fairy tale, she was in reality, and in reality fairy tales hardly ever come true, or in this case, not for her.
They met in the most unusual way; she was a quite girl, the sort of girl that hid her beauty, under her rather large reading glasses, and her immense college books. He was the ‘popular’ guy at college, tall, brown and handsome, friendly with anyone and everyone, all the girls wanted him, and all the guys envied him.
When she walked in and saw him sitting there, next to her seat, in the science class, made something in her heart beat so loud, she was sure someone had heard it. Usually if it had been anyone else, she would have caused mayhem, but since it was him, she just thanked her lucky stars. The minute she saw those “gorgeous” features on his face she automatically knew he was the ‘one’ for her, but if only she could talk to him, just saying hello, would have been a result to her. She slowly walked up towards her desk, looking down, grinning to herself. As she was walking, she noticed how his face lid up when he saw her. ‘Hello’ her face gazed up ‘you don’t mind me sitting here do you; I think I will concentrate more if I sit here’. Was he talking to her, she wasn’t sure, why would he talk to her, she was practically nobody, or so she thought she was. ‘Oh umm yeah you can sit here I don’t mind’ was just about all she managed to reply.

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Hold on, i'm emailing the nobel committee to nominate you for the nobel prize in literature.. Laughing Laughing

seriously, i didn't read it. Not because it stinks but i don't have the attention span...

<---------A.D.D.....I have problems reading my textbooks without medication.
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[quote="LionHeart-112"]Hold on, i'm emailing the nobel committee to nominate you for the nobel prize in literature.. Laughing Laughing

seriously, i didn't read it. Not because it stinks but i don't have the attention span...

<---------A.D.D.....I have problems reading my textbooks without medication.[/quote]

whl least your honest Crying or Very sad
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so you got an A on the assignment. i think it was good.
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Not Bad.
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Not Bad.

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Oh i finally read it...

It's good..

better than basra's crap... Cool
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^ sup a.sshole.
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^^not much B-hole.
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i havent recieved my results yet, i am sitting up finishing it off (there's loads more) have to hand it in tomoro
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thanx lion Laughing Smile
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you are very welcome...

the writing is good but i dunno if i like the content.....too-shall i say-western.

"but since it was him, she just thanked her lucky stars"

sincee when do we thank stars?
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Post by surria »

Sis, I think it's good you have the hubris and suspense thing down. However I think perhaps giving it a twist would have made it brilliant, like at the very end having him to be actually her teacher. Also, in correcting shift in time, make sure that if you begin writing a paper in the past time, don’t' shift now and then to the present, and if you begin the present, don’t' shift to the past. All in all it was good!
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[quote="LionHeart-112"]you are very welcome...

the writing is good but i dunno if i like the content.....too-shall i say-western.

"but since it was him, she just thanked her lucky stars"

sincee when do we thank stars?[/quote]


its meant to be a westernised story....................... Wink Very Happy


thanx surria - giving it a twist would have made it brilliant, like at the very end having him to be actually her teacher - i will do that very smart thinkin i like that ............anymore ideas Very Happy
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Post by LionHeart-112 »

xmyway,

gotcha...then be sure to include homosexuals, stds, bastard children and crack whores in your story..lol..if it's western, make it as juicy and real as possible. Laughing Laughing Laughing
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i'll be up all night then Crying or Very sad

but thanx, i'll include some of it though thanx rose
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